clown by day, inamorato by night
across the tents, day saunters
faceless children struggle
bore through a frosted window
impasto lipstick, trademark smile
shrivelled jester hat
tripping on elongated shoes
as the grey afternoon droops
night's screams flare
reflected by awakened eyes
that scent of sweet strawberries
at times, of exotic coconut
linger, ever so genteel, and inspire
polished songs of rustling leaves
stars painting a luminous genre
divulge tumultuous sentiments
oh the tumult, indeed
brusque, irregular existence
the great tumult, indeed
tags:
literature
10 comments:
as we know, poetry is very subjective. so, this is MY interpretation.
i think the first paragraph is about the complexity we faced. and the inability to stand up while living each day with uncertainties.
second paragraph is nice. ain't sure what impasto means but 'trademark smile' is like a fake thing? or perhaps, often we 'practise' certain things too much to adapt and conform to the society. it's not real nor genuince but we have to do it to survive. i love the 'tripping on elongated shoes'. it gives me an impression that we are all trying very hard to surpass people's expectations of us. apparently, it's overwhelming('elongated') and our ability is restrained. sometimes, we fail. ('tripping'). moreover, it's trying to say that we are trying too hard?
third paragraph has nice sentence structure. the situation exacerbates and it's becoming more severe. the best part is we have realised it.
fourth paragraph is very subtle. the words are soft in a sense that it flows. but, i feel it's a bit contradicting.
fifth paragraph is a case of leading someone on. giving someone hope but it came crashing down. i sense betrayal and adultery(HAHA). it's like hmm, cheating someone.
sixth paragraph is the confirmation of the invisibility of the party. neither here, nor there.
let me guess? this is about love? you take care!
*genuine
i made another poem. HAHA LONG LIVE POETRY.
not contradicting... contrasting...
haha! you're so errrrrrrrrrr. i wrote so long for you okay, and you just replied here in one sentence! HOW COULD YOU! haha!
ok... then i'll say longer...
for the first stanza... if that's ur interpretation then let it be... but it's something deeper than that.
um the ur interpretation about the second stanza is somehow correct. ur being too cynical (and maybe shallow)lah... must i explain my own poem? huuuu.... feel so naked if i do that here... haha
the third is kind of a break from the first two.. i used contrasting words to do that.
the fourth is about... you know... that thing...
the fifth isn't about bad things you knoe... it's about that thing also...
ur somehow right about the last one. "brusque, irregular existance" means somethimes the person is there sometimes not.
there you go.. haha... happy?
not much disclosure of info here though. haha. nxt time i see msn i say.
now you said it's that thing. 4th and 5th do make sense now.
anyway, new poems please! i read all the poems under your tag 'literature'. phew, i didn't know you wrote so many poems leh. but, all got susbtance one. not bad ah! haha!
good job yo. (:
wah. ur to kind bro...
haha! it's not kind la. it's being factual man. hehe.
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